IN CLASS THINGIE

REVERSE OUTLINE

• Thesis
• I need to stop using the word "you" in all my sentences. I like using the word "you" because I feel it makes the reader think of themselves in the situation but that can take away from the example. That person may have never drank alcohol or may not own a phone. If they cant relate to what Im trying to say then the use of the word "you" can take away from the impact of the story.
• Support Paragraph 1 drunk driving
• The supporting story against drunk driving needs to be cited from M.A.D.D. (mothers against drunk driving) properly. The story needs to have last names and be personal.
• Support Paragraph 2 drunk driving
• I need to reword some of the sentences to support my essay not go against.
• I need to reread the citing page for indented citing.
• GET RID OF THE WORD YOU
• Support Paragraph texting
• Rewording several sentences to sound professinal rather then "cave-man grammar."
• GET RID OF THE WORD YOU
• Supporting Paragraph- Prevention
• Reword sentences to sound professional
• I DIDNT USE THE WORD YOU. WOOHOO
• Change Punishment
• Need to move last sentence to beginning of conclusion
• Conclusion
• I like my conclusion and would change anything other then putting the Work Cited on a different page.

REFLECTIVE ESSAY

• Thesis
• Talking about what i have learned- MLA format.
• Support Bit
• Im still working on proper use of you and I.I over use commas and need to learn how to put information in MLA format properly. I write my papers as if Im talking face to face with a person which is good but I need to know when to write personally and when to sounds professional.
• Support Bit
• I now know what MLA format is and my grammar has improved from the first essay i turned in. My paragrpah flow nicley between paragraph and have learned my stron points are introduction and conlcutsion but need to write my information professionally.
• I like talking as if Im talking to a person.
• Conclusion
• I was lucky if I could write a good paragraph when i first started this class and now i can write a 7 page research paper. I can write a 3 page essay without freakinout over how i will sound on paper.

Rebecca Pottebaum