Introduction
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Thesis
§ The
presence of gun-free zones or areas with restrictive firearms laws foster an
environment in which troubled individuals can operate without the threat of
retaliation or resistance.
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Need to make minor punctuation and
grammatical corrections
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Paragraph 1 - Bill of Rights
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2nd Amendment, Constitutional
basis for argument
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Punctuation and formatting issues with MLA,
and paragraph indention.
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Reinforce the rest of the Bill of Rights to
support argument
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Correct quotations, “shall not be infringed”
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Paragraph 2 - History of Violence,
Swiss/UK/US
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Clarify the examples and lay them out
appropriately
§ Swiss
§ UK
§ US
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Punctuation, firearms per capita numbers
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Paragraph 3 – United Kingdom
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Clarify argument
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Word usage
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Explain numbers and how they apply
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Paragraph 4 – FBI Stats
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Punctuation, verb tense.
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MLA citing
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Clarify point of data
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Paragraph 5 – Violence and Gun owners
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Work on word choice and better flowing
sentences
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Move from coincidence to direct support
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Conclusion – Laws of Man
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Work on punctuation, word choice, and tense
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Reword conclusion F.P. to better complete the
paper
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Works Cited
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Refine and ensure in proper MLA format
